Do you think my girlfriend will find this one part of my story to be offensive?

from what i see it is quite an experience, i think it panned out to be quite a story, i don't think your girlfriend will be offended due to the fact throughout the humiliations she still stood her grounds and did not give in to the dragons torment. I think it takes guts to be in the cage dressed like a canary and still hold your head up high. great script.